An edit of my in-class calisthenic. Each line has been edited at least 2-3 times. I tend to be word. I tried to focus on an adjective and that came to mind with the smell, the I tried condensing the idea behind that adjective. I actually forgot the adjective for a couple but I can put in parentheses what I meant for some of them.
Smell: Freshly Sharpened Pencil
1. An egg crate nesting on the interstate. (Potential)
2. A popsicle gone, wooden remains, ground to spiny fibers in your teeth.
3. Like the twang of too much yellow on a naked dog. (Sharp)
4. Mud pies by the lake, fistfuls of duck shit, relenting under domestic fingers.
5. Licking ice on windows, liquid crystal, dribbling down your chin. (Smooth)
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